Reflections For Lily

Hey there! Can anyone help me with my reflection, I thought it was ok, but apparently i need to make it clearer ??

Lily was very interested in the green tunnel. This object is new and turned out quite a bit daunting to other children but Imogen expresssed her curiosity, oohing and aahing each time she went through the tunnel. Lily approaches new challenges with confidence and persists when faced with a challenge (Learning Outcome 1; Children have a strong sense of Identity) Imogen is very familiar with the rest of the obstacle course so she is very enthusiactic & confident even though the beam is a challenge she still perservers and is very proud of herself, non stop smiling & giggling. (learning Outcome 4; Children are confident and involved learners)
“Children need a rich environment with lots of opportunities to be active, and explore” says Kohlberg, lily is demonstarting her gross motor development, pulling her body up, reaching and grasping. Lily is learning to use her muscles to explore the course by grasping, turning, pressing, feeling, developing her sensorimotorplay.